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Published by BETWEENWATERSUNSEEN | Saturday, September 03, 2011 10:52 AM
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Thank you all so much. It's interesting to see how much comes out when you talk about childhood, some I think we'd rather keep below the surface. It was a great prompt this month, and I think everyones put out such great work.
Eerily like my own childhood experiences. Great story.
This line really stood out for me for some reason: "His skin was flecked with rust, inherited from his mother’s side, and he had his dad’s laugh, a sound you heard too often."
Okay, one thing I love about your writing, and not just in this, is how you manage to put so much detail into your descriptions and character actions without weighing them down and stunting the pacing or flow of the entire paragraph or piece.
"The most we can hope for now, is that whatever memories that street holds, it has finally forgotten what I’ve tried so hard to reconcile, and remembers only that we were young, though no one can really be forgiven for that."
I enjoy the notion that a street (or any place) would hold memories, even if they aren't good. This was well said, and a nice ending.
Wonderful memory of back-in-the-day times. Your descriptions of your friends created pictures in my mind.
Thanks for sharing.
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