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Published by MARIE KAUFMAN | Thursday, July 29, 2010 4:49 AM
BR 100 Word Contest
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Very Bob Dylan-esque Marie. I see this being one of his songs...big compliment :o) I like the simple line of "Today's man" - it tells us so much!
",,, I see her squatting unladylike in the littered lot of the liquor store." The alliteration here is wonderful.
I really like the "swarming dust of semis distorting their faces." I think that's a great line! And I love the ending as well. Very subtle, yet powerful. Well done.
I love the tense change at the end from third to first person and how the focus of the story shifts. In terms of particular words, I like "Her grin falls," and "Rising, she places..." Nice job.
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